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I think it's odd that it's a poem about war, but the title implies that it's about love's relationship with sacrifice. My guess is the poem got away from you while you were writing it. I don't think that you should necessarily get rid of the whole war thing, especially as the imagery is exceptional, but you may want to add more in the beginning showing how sacrifice for love leads or relates to war. Then, at the end, tie that all back into love and sacrifice instead of ending abruptly in the middle of your description of war and leaving the thought unfinished and the poem seemingly incomplete.
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